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I do not know what I should expect
you to come to know as you unwrap my bones
and the tissues of my belongings.
I carved this mark for you, no one else,
hoping it would make me known to you.
But when young Dawn with her rose-red fingers
shines once more, it will be up to you.
I asked my son to hold to the stars
on his journey so that we both, gazing upon them,
would be united, barely believing it myself.
Now the stars have become my home,
for they are the only place I can find him.
Hence, when young Dawn with her rose-red fingers
shines once more, will you hold to Starlight?
Though I risk heresy to admit it, I am persuaded
to wonder if this goddess will overcome all
her imperfections and survive to create you,
and if her beauty will draw you near if she has;
I have worried and fretted endless days over this.
So as young Dawn with her rose-red fingers
shines once more, I simply pray you will exist
and come to find me. I pray that when you
unwrap me, touch my fingers stenciled on these walls,
pool my dyed shells in your palm, as I often have,
breathe in the cave air that I have labored under,
glance up to the stars lighting an empty sky,
you will know me, deeply, truly, and in that knowing,
give life to this life, make perpetual what I cannot.
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’When young Dawn with her rose-red fingers shone once more’ is from Homer’s Odyssey (Fagles’ excellent translation) where it is used to launch many of Odysseus’s adventures.
*awestruck silence*
ok, I think I’ll retire from writing now and find a new hobby.
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Oh, no you don’t! I was channelling you on this one! You are at least as much to blame as me!
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❤ You are gracious and generous. I will be inspired now. 🙂
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I can feel all of nature coming to life in animate form. And, I can also feel the narrator’s longing and emotion intensely. Wonderful poem!
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Thank you! So glad you liked it.
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Yep, that was a cool one. Thanks for posting it so we could read.
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Thanks so much! I cannot say the conversations you had with your 11 c. visitor did not at all enter my mind. Thanks for the inspiration.
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I love your writing on the rock carvings but wish you had posted the photo from which you got your inspiration. You did a marvelous job…that last verse has a somewhat mournful, longing feel to it…excellent.
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Thank you. Your words are very kind.
Yeah, I don’t do the picture thing so much …
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After I read it I saw that you said it was a previous write, but really it went perfectly with the prompt. I loved it!
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Sorry you didn’t post the photo you chose since it was part of the prompt. However, the poem in and of itself is so very good. I like that it was a previous write and fit so well with this prompt. I like things that can be multipurpose. The longing in the last verse is so palpable. I’m not into photos or illustrations much myself because I feel the words should be the focus, so I totally understand.
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Thank you for your kind words!
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Oh I can see this matching the people on the boat so well.. Though a previous write I think it does fit,… Myself I always use pictures with my writing, I really love how you worked in the cadence, it begs to be read aloud.
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Thanks! I had a picture in my head that I literally saw over a decade ago. So images are of course really helpful and orienting.
I do have to say this was a fantastic prompt. There is so much mystery in these drawings and I think only poetry can open up the mystery for us. Thanks for the great idea!
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Ah.. Shamans from past to present seek to relate
deeper meanings of life and farther
we now are from cultural
noise.. those messages
still come in loud
and clear
for us
with
ears
of HearT..
it will probably make
them a little sad
that folks
still
take
it literal..
but that’s the
way of the world
and human nature..
some folks deeper
some folks
not as
deep..
but change
is always possible..
and worth trying to relate..:)
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Wow! What a wonderful way to respond. Thank you so much.
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Smiles..:)
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the longing is deeply felt here…..
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Thanks. I loved this prompt and how it encouraged us to think about the lives of these ancients.
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Such a strong piece. I too wish there was a picture here. Nevertheless.. great job!
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Thank you very much. I have pictures in my head and … hard to share!! Thanks for your kind words.
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Thank you. Very kind of you.
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Aw…a beautiful poem of love and loss – nicely structured.
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Such kind words. Thank you!
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when young Dawn with her rose-red fingers… I do love that line and think it was so effective to repeat it. Beautiful poem.
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Thank you. Sometimes I think poetry is like building a piece of art from found objects (in our heads). So glad you enjoyed it!
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I specially admire the last stanza ~ Very evocative & passionate voice ~
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Thank you so much!
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